Intro starts out very loud n fast with drums, then you cut the drums and put only kicks, why not starting with not drums, then only kicks then kicks and hats? this way it's far more smooth and increases the interest to what is next, Basically your intro lacks into some variety and automations, everything starts at the same time, the melody is very basic, lacks on some good bassline. Song structure needs muuuuuuuch work, the sounds you used for the drums are really basic, for the melody it doesn't really matter but could do lot better. Overall i would say that's a nice try but you have to work more to get a better result, you have nice ideas but just don't know how to use your skills right, i think you can do way better than this! Nice try, i am not going to underrate this to give you some influence to your new pieces.
thanks for the review, first real helpful one ive ever got, ill follow your suggestions, thanks
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