Sound: Mixing needs a bit of work here. There are parts where the high ends are too loud and actually are bit painful. Those could use a bit of trimming. Maybe a subtle low pass filter over the highest of frequencies.
Composition: Song structure wise, this song isn't very organized. For one, there isn't a recurring motif to help any part of this song particularly stick to the listener's mind so the parts that stay are the intro and outro.
Fit to Art: Interestingly enough, I think this one does a decent job. The chaos of the track fits what's depicted on the art pretty well honestly. A little bit more structure in the song would help tell a better story, but good direction.
Originality: Huge hit here as this track is rather... not original at all. Standard drums, lead, bass combo with little to make it stand out from the multitude of other guitar shredder songs out there.
Ending Thoughts: Good start, although I think it sounds like you jumped on your guitars, shredded, and threw it up. Maybe work a bit more on developing the song out.
Well, I didn't like the guitar, the bass, or the drums. I feel like this melodic composition has potential if different instruments were used it would be better but I felt it needed better instruments and mixing. It's a nice attempt with the melodical structure though.
Metal is not my thing, but you seem to have some sort of a blend between hardcore and hardcore (electronic) going on here. Pretty neat, could use a little better balancing in the mixdown, but I'll give you props for doing something with your hands and not just a mouse and keyboard.
Thanks a ton dude! I always appreciate honest, well thought out critique.