Track 013 // Length: 4:01 // Techno
Lyrics written and performed by Pauly B
My first lyrical. Definitely beginner work, but I was learning. It would be the first time I ever edited a different entity into a piece of work. For what it was, this wasn’t half bad according to reviews. I would also learn about more complex controls for special effects like reverb. At this point I did not yet have much editing knowledge, so the pitch isn’t perfect, and there’s echo all throughout. I had no idea what I was doing yet, but it was definitely a broadening of my horizons. I did learn a little bit about working with percentages and times to work with speed. For example, the echoing of the pianos and the voice.
LYRICS:
All the times that I have been there
And you turned your back on me
But the thing I just don't get
I dunno why you can't see
That I'm holding your hand in proposal
And I'm down upon my knees
Now the least that you can do for me
is to put my mind at ease
Cause I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim of love
Cause I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim of love
All the times that I have been there
And you turned your back on me
But the thing I just don't get
I dunno why you can't see
That I'm holding your hand in proposal
And I'm down upon my knees
Now the least that you can do for me
is to put my mind at ease
Cause I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim of love
I'm a victim, I'm a victim of your, victim of your love
some advice
yeah, my philosophy of techno vocals, if its a male voice, robotic is best, if female, very high-pitched works well. this seems to me like a female vocal song. the instrument at 1:30 to about 2:00 is pretty annoying at the pitch you used. but most of the music is good.
5.5/10 rounded up to 6
Well this was an earlier piece, my first lyrical, and I gotta say a score like this compared to some of my other projects is actually expected. Back then I didn't have any chance of getting a female voice. Now my options are spread LOL
Thanks for your honesty man, that's what I love in a review
Needs something...
I'm thinking it's the voice that ruins it, unfortunutely. It's flat, low, and quiet, which makes it annoying. This marks the first time I haven't given you a 10.
Yeah. This is an old project, back when I was still learning how to edit stuff. I guess I screwed up on this one but you can only learn from mistakes, right? LOL Thanks for the review
Anoying Voice
I guess it was okay, good piano riffs, but the voice was really anoying. Could have got better vocals. Or at least try to get better vocals. Another thing about the voice was that I couldn't understand anything coming out of it. I think I heard the word it a couple times but that is about it.
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Nice one.
Not too bad, although at a couple of points, the vioce seemed a bit, erm, flat? Like there was not that much emothion in it. Meh... I dont know. Lol. Anyway, for your first lyrical, not bad! Keep it up!
Now aside from those 2 songs i asked you to do on MSN Messenger, I would you to mak a "Stetich" version of Sonic 3d Blast Boss theme and Sonic 3d Blast Final Boss theme under ONE condition. YOU PUT ALL YOU CAN INTO THIS. THIS IS MY FAVORIT SONG, AND BY THE SOUND OF YOUR REMIXES, I WANT THIS TO BE THE KING OFF ALL SONIC REMIXES (if possible) ON NG.COM!!! If you can do it, good luck. I dont want this song to be killed. This is my favorite Boss theme from Sonic.
OK. Can do, but I have a lot of haters out there in NG, a bunch of jerks wont leave me alone, so it probably wont be the best on NG, but I can give it my all.
Sorry but not your best.
It's your first lyrical posted, so get ready for some criticizm.
Ok, first off, something has to be done to make the voice clearer yet still mix in well with the instruments. Try experimenting with adding bass or treble and reverbs and other effects... or you could simply lower the instrumentals a tad smudgit lol. Some moments of it become plain too. I love the idea of the instrumental break but it needs to be a tad more flashy at some points.
I love this song though, especially the chorus "I'm a victim of Love". The echo was very nice. You need to make even the echo have Rhythm, which you've done so that's no problem with you. The disortion caused by the echo only makes the song more exciting. I love the voice (is it yours?). It has emotion and it's a nice tenor. A couple of notes seemed out of tune but I have a bad tuning ear anyway so I may be wrong.
I'm downloading this song. Thanks for putting it up here!
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