(Note - I review pretty harshly, so don't take a low score personally! I don't vote harshly.)
The build up to the drop was kinda weak - those kicks need to come out a lot more. And in the drop you kept in those high pads that were there before, which messed up the otherwise dark aesthetic of the drop and take away a lot of the energy. If you would switch those out with some deep bass it would be a lot better I think.
I saw on audio advertisements that you just started using FL - this is really great for just starting out, so keep it up! I could see you being scouted, not immediately, but maybe soon if you keep working hard. :-)
Thank you very much sir. ^^ i will work hard.