I dig the vibe you are going for here man... but... I can't really hear a lot of the melody because of the distortion and clipping. I REALLY like the style though. It is like this industrial creepy techno.... totally fucking cool and original sound.
It's certainly unique. I kinda like the atmosphere, but it felt really busy and noisy in most parts, especially in the beginning. The vocals are almost completely drowned by the other sounds.
I really like this as a build up track, feel it should drop into something with a bit more energy, think Aesthetic Perfection, Combichrist type thing would be awesome!