It doesn't really have any progression in it and it sounds really weird. It does sound a bit like Hardcore/Happy Hardcore and i guess that that's your goal to reach. I would suggest that u go back to the writing table and add some nice mello's in it. also deleted the lyrics in it it doesn't sound so good. the only really good thing in it is the kick. also try to layer your kick a bit more use snare, hihat's and claps to layer your kick and build it up.
so what really needs to be done are some nice melody's ( try some super saws ) and the total arangement of the song
Keep it up ;)