Good, I see what you're trying to do.
First of all, I thought this piece on the verge of being stereotypical if it weren't for those drums. I would have liked less repeat and some different beats/verses in this track. I definitely felt the eerieness but it wasn't horror. Maybe you're not shooting for a horror genre. However, if you want to become hard core about making a scary and very eerie tracks I suggest googling Midnight Syndicate. They are very creepy and will give you an idea how far you can go! Nice try!