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Commander Bentley
Lusus Naturae


What the fuck is up, bitches, I'm Commander Bentley
You look very calm and unperturbed to see me
Obviously we haven't met so why don't you sit down
I will tell you why I'm the baddest motherfucker around

I'm here for war, I'm KIDDING, I'm here for your girlfriend
Best you hand her over or your life will quickly end
In the form of a headshot from my fucking rifle
Now you understand that I'm not one with which to be trifled

I hope I've made my point to you and I will not have to harm you
I'll pour shampoo in your eyes if I absolutely have to
Tell your girlfriend to report back to my ship ASAP pronto
On that note, my brand new friend, I will have to go

So I will never see you later, or for your sake I hope
Cuz I will rip off your head and shit down your fucking throat
Now I will leave you with that thought to think about for a while
So go and tell your little friends Commander Bentley's fucking vile


(Note - I review pretty harshly, so don't take a low score personally! I don't vote harshly.)

I don't listen to a LOT of hip hop, but I think I listen to enough to be able to judge. (I really like A Tribe Called Quest if that gives me any credence ;P) Your flow is pretty decent actually, it'll need a little bit of work, but it's pretty good. I think you should give the beat a bigger presence though, since the beat is a really crucial aspect of hiphop.

And finally I have a bone to pick with your lyrics, which need some work. I'd suggest a little more care with your rhymes - girlfriend/end or hope/throat is kinda silly :P. Word choice could improve -"your life will quickly end" is a little clunky. I also think the topic could be improved.

I just saw on audio advertisements that this was your first rap track. It's a pretty great first try! Your flow is actually really good for a first time through. Keep it up!

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1.00 / 5.00

Apr 5, 2013
6:01 PM EDT
Hip Hop - Modern
File Info
1.7 MB
1 min 52 sec

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