"A Night to Remeber" by vinnw541*
Comments: The entire recording was full of mouth sounds like pops, puffs, breaths, and swallowing. It was like I was listening from the inside of your throat. The range was so-so. The falsetto voice started weak, but got better. I would have liked the russian(?) sounding voice to be deeper. Your screams were extremely fake and lifeless. The skit sounded like you were playing with action figures. The Gollum voice was a bit unoriginal. The skit was also all in 1 take. The fear and dying sounds that the characters made weren't believeable much like the screaming. Overall, you really need to try to get out of that self concious state and comepletely lose all inhibition to get the best from your acting. Also, record each line seperately and mix them together after. To get rid of the noise, back up from the mic when you record, invest in a pop filter and learn how to use your recording program's noise removal.
I can see you really tried with getting those different characters, which I think you did a good job with. I have a feeling this was all one take and you were switching voices around in real time? It would help to record in bits so that you can focus on each character more. This could also help with projecting the voice of the characters more efficiently because they felt held back, perhaps due to thinking about transitioning. This could also benefit from at least some sound effects and reverb. With just a small echoy drone and a touch of reverb, I would further understand that it was a cave they were in, and then just cutting those effects off at the end would tell me that the atmosphere changed and the main character woke up. So in general, you've got the foundation of the story and the characters, I just think they need a lot more extra stuff to back them up. Nice work! I liked your Ryan character, I kinda wasn't expecting that demeanor or tone from him.
Thanks a lot for the suggestions. I've been meanin to get around to adding the effects but have been rather busy. And I never even thought of doing them in segments. That makes a lot of sense. Thanks again!
Very nice! I take it this is for the voice acting contest, right? Good luck.
Yes it is. Thanks man!