NGAP 10TH ANNIVERSARY CONTEST REVIEW
Right after SineRider's dreamy submission, moving straight on to reviewing this is one hell of a contrast haha. Great work with it though!
It's hard to take a song seriously when it has lyrics like that but if I had to speak truthfully this was actually very well-made! First off; lovely singing. A bit weak in some parts in the intro, but that's nothing a second take won't fix. Parts like 0:44 are where we can really hear your voice shine; you've got an excellent recording voice and a great range. Brilliant vocal harmonies too; the original had none of those and I'm so glad that you added them. They work really well for parts like 0:08 and the "pick me up baby" iterations at the end. Really cool guitar-playing as well! Great idea turning the last part into a kickass guitar solo.
However, what's instantly apparent is that this isn't all that different from the original; you say yourself it was recreated note by note, and while this is an impressive feat, basically what you've done is make a 'standardised' pop version of the original, making it considerably more unininteresting/typical than the original is. I won't deny it sounds great in this genre. I also won't deny that you executed some things here even better than the original did, like the singing, the ending and the transition at 0:44. That said, the structure is practically identical and I can't credit you for that many new ideas. That, and I'm not a big fan of your mix, mainly percussion-wise. I'm not such a fan of the original's percussion and I think yours is better, even if it's just the same beat with different samples, but I would've liked some beefier and somewhat more varied percussion.
It's a real shame you didn't venture much into new stuff from the original, because you most certainly have the talent to do so!