I don't know the background of this skit at all so my review might not be applicable in this case:
I think that even if you're going to emphasis the void of music, with these sound effects, you should have some water running. Let me explain what I mean by that. The sound effects you're parading through this skit ride on silence. In general sound engineering you'll have to combat this by either;
1) Use/make noises with more swelling or sweep qualities in order to ride the silence
2) Fill in the silence, throughout the skit. You could perhaps loop, quietly in the background, some empty vinyl scratches or perhaps AM-radio static.
Thank You for your kind input. =)
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