Not bad bro, not bad at all. The issue, it reminds me of my 80's life. Heard the same shit then. If you want to appeal? Update the style, less the ol' 80's rap style is what you want.
Thanks! I do plan on doing a couple more rap songs, but this style just fit with the beat I used. Next one will be a lot faster paced.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.