Sorry to say but I agree with ATTW7-Envy. There are way too many high pitched piercing sounds. They could have been fine for the background if kept really low, but they hurt and overpower my ears.
It's also really short, but that's not really my concern. The point is that this track is out of balance and needs a lot more work. I don't mean to discourage you, but give it some more thought before you just throw the track out there.