I personally think you nailed it!
This song truly feels phenominally cinematic and dramatic, you did a really good job of having it tell a story by having the sound fluxuate in intricacy and energy and I commend you for that :)
5/5, song faved, author faved :) I'll be sure to listen to lots more of your fantastic work.
P.S., may i ask what software/programs and methods you use to create your work?