Hey man, this is very imaginative, and beautiful. There were some technical difficulties you may have faced with your instruments at 1:20. The clean guitars were out of tune. The lead was heart felt, although it did not move around a lot. The phrasing was in key, but I would consider using a few more techniques. The sound and mix in this piece is pretty awesome. The guitars were exactly where they should have been. I loved that part of it. I noticed throughout the song, that you continually struggled with technique, and keeping your guitars consistently tuned. I can't tell you how important that is.
All in all, I think you have a mind for music. If you can manage to work on a few things with dynamics and also your instrument, you could really do some damage in a really good way in my opinion bruddah.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.