Mostly mirroring what's been said, this could do with some proper mixing and EQing, it peaks out pretty hard at times and it ruins the flow a bit. Other than that it's real damn nice, often these chiptune tracks on NG suffer from being really shallow with a serious lack of layering, but you've really got it down.

not half bad but some parts are MUCH louder than others not sure if you did that on purpose but it is bugging me to be honest

Nice job on this mix and the music video. You got talent. Looking forward to more of your submissions.