Over all good song, the only problem i have with it at the moment is the horrid midi instruments. Try looking into edirol orchestral or a copy of holly wood strings ( drool ). If you cant get ahold of either of those, try lowering the attack of those strings and adding some reverb. Some times that can salvage bad midi strings if done right.
Logic 9 has terrible orchestral instruments Im currently still adding to the song. (Ive sent you a few messages on skype)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.