Lyrics are great and the melody is awesome. Losing half a point for the chorus being a tiny bit too loud. Great track overall!
I like how you combined Rap, with this rock/pop type sound (chorus).
To me, the first time you sing the Chorus everything is on beat.
Then the end of the second verse (When you talk about friendships) I feel like you get a off beat, but a little bit.
Then towards the end of the song, where you are singing "You wonder why, you wonder why time goes by," Like the middle of the chorus its a little off.
But other then that it's really good. I like it a lot. [: Good job, keep writing.
You sound like the Script! When you sing.
Thank you that was definitely what im going for in the chorus.
The end of the second verse I talk about my dead friend, that one? Time stamps would be awesome :)
Also for the wonder why part I would love some time stamps.
Hey thank you for the criticism I really appreciate it :) i really wanna fix this up since it is my first try at this.
um this was cool, i feel the message and see it means alot to you. flow could be a little more perfected cause your off beat here and there, other then thats it's alright
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Hey thats really nice of you can you give me the time stamps and lines that were off flow? I would like to fix it. I wanna know where I am off beat
Pretty good. I think the vocals need to be leveled lower to mix with the music better. Also it sounds like you break your flow a few times too. The backing track sounds amazing though.
"My own friends hated me. Shit." This line makes me crack up for some reason lol.
Lol maybe I will change that line that makes you laugh. So you think the vocals should be a little lower than the music? It would be great if you can tell me where I broke flow. It is hard for me to realize sometimes :)
alright. not necessarily my cup of tea...but makes me wanna be yo friend! :D
lol thanks :D
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