A good use of vocals.
I agree about the choppy comment, but it freaked me out a lot, so I'm pretty sure it served its purpose.
The song is interesting, i can totally understand that you were trying to do something different on this one.
I like the broken record effect, but some of them don't seem very well positioned considering the music tempo.
Try to fix this and you'll have a beatifull song.
It's..... very busy, and choppy almost. I feel that you were trying to go with a Broken record type of sound when you kept repeating parts of the song, which can work, but I'm not really sure it worked well with this. I'm also not sure if you were trying to make your own version of the main theme song or if you were adding onto the original theme, either way it's not a bad concept just needs some work and Ironing out.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.