I honestly love your work.I understand this is a demo and intro for your new album.Even so..it still is good from my point of view...Now for a bit of advice....well refering to the intro it could add a little more to the sinister emotions you COULD or WANT to make us feel is by adding something melodic and horror like from a start of a seriously bloody horror and somewhat more loud between the speech that we can hear there...Thats all i would like more to hear.the track is just fine..a little more tweaking like you said..
Keep up the good work,seriously..you are good.Don't waste your potential.