I appreciate that you make changes to your song to make it better. Also the fact that you keep making your music free is good. Money so often takes the fun out of making music.
0-0:31 = I hate to start like this, but your lead instrument is poorly made. The background fx sound a bit messy too. The panning effect is good, but not enough to really bring me into the mood you were trying to go for.
0:31- 1:02 Great transition! However that wind sound is still irritating. Not bad with the echoes of the lead instrument. The buildup sounds rather weak considering it is only the drum roll that indicates it. Perhaps have your instruments also reach a climax to aid the buildup.
1:02-2:03 Not so much of the climatic part. Drum n clap pattern sounds rather empty. Not enough hi hats perhaps.
2:03- 3:18 Good job with the bass pattern. Some notes sound a bit too subby so I can't hear the tone clearly...just a minor issue. Again, the wind fx ruins the moment. 2:48 it starts to feel a little messy. After the buildup I was expecting the real climax, but was disappointed to hear a mellow part. You know its a concern when a listener can't tell when a climax of the song is.
3:18 I'm a fan of piano sounds but I feel like it goes nowhere. I appreciate your attempt to be diverse, but it has to have a purpose.
I'm not going to comment the rest as it loops. Overall, I am impressed with your attempt to make a repetitive genre diverse. I am all for diversity as it does take a lot more effort. Just remember to have a common theme involved in the transition or it just sounds like a remix of a bunch of songs together. Yes, I am guilty of this too but I just want to make you aware about it. Your instruments need a bit of refinement as some sound generic. That wind fx needs to be changed. 5/5 for the effort put in. Keep getting better.
Ya the arp in the start is noticeably poor quality, i had difficulty fitting the song under 15 mb in mp3, So the render out quality had to take a small dive that i hoped people wouldn't notice lol. If you also listen to the lead coming in at 1:33 it sounds the same as the arp. It wasn't really due to the fact of how i made it rather than the fact i couldn't fit what i needed into 15 mb.
Note taken for the climax, i was reading about a few news ways shortly after you posted. i'll try to re-upload with some rising pitch build ups, or sweeping hertz n master or something.
- hi hats, check
I have the bass pretty low through out the song, it hovers from 300 to 30 hertz. i would imagine at times on some speakers or head phones it will sound subby i might have to move it around or boost the higher ranges of it. For the climax, im a huge fan of false build ups, i love taking something to a certain point and droping things off to a more chill section. If there is one thing i may have to just keep would be that. i just feel each song should be different, and if you can tell where it's going before hand that just means it's not original enough.( my personal opinion) However i will try to find some medium between the two in the future.
For the piano i tried to lay something down i thought would have some feeling to it. I suppose it didn't come across as such. I really don't know music theory, i just kinda pick everything out on how i feel at the time. I'm seeing pianos pieces take a little more know how, and i will work on hopefully making them portray a specific feeling rather than having them as i do now.
keeping the theme is a huge problem i have, if there is one thing i have to say is my largest problem is themes. I often place almost entirely new songs in inside other songs and them bring them back to the original. i've pretty much wrangled my control over that with this song.
i will lower the wind=)
Thanks for the feed back, and don't hate to start a review off with a negative comment. I personally am not a fan of reading positive things about songs. When i stop seeing negative comments that means i don't know what others think of specific things with in my songs. In turn that means i cant progress as easily.I appreciate you taking time to review my song in such detail, and i hope you can keep track of my future works and provide the same type of reviews.
I love it. It sounds amazing. Downloading now. I really like the way the background arp phases in and out behind the square synths. Definitely worth the 5 stars.
I have to agree with Sequenced. The bass and kick frequency muddling is something that I have had in some of my previous works, so yes, we've all been there. : )
The feeling I got from this when I first heard it, before the other parts started kicking in, was that I was in this testing facility with smoke in all corners of the room, it was hazy and dark. This is what trance is all about: carrying the listener over in the tide, and having him come up with inspired sequences from that little trance he had.
Keep up the good work!
Ya, im uncertain what to do about that kick and the bass fighting for hertz control. That bass takes up a huge lower range and with out it taking up so much room i lose out on a massive amount of body it gives the song. I might have to learn how to make a decent kick for next time so i can put the hertz where i need them, rather out of the way of everything else. Also thanks, i really got the feel for trance with this song. i'm glad i could take you some where else for a brief amount of time.
Thanks for taking time to leave a comment m8 and ill try to work on mixing better next time.
not bad. you got a good sense of chords, melodies, and timing. all you have to do now is clear up your frequencies. you should cut low freq. for the synths, and pump up the mid freq for your pads and things like that. also, make sure you don't have the bass and the kick on the same frequency. that is generally why a song can sound muffled.
Also, make sure you raise the high frequencies for your hihats and clap/snares. it's hard to hear them.
keep it up.
Ya, i was having a huge problem when eqing the bass with the kicks. i tried moving kick around to make room for the bass, but in the end they over lapped and there wasn't much i could do about it( or knew how rather). in the first uploaded version i had lowered the 50-100 hertz range to solve that problem, but then lost the body of the kick and bass and the mix sounded rather empty. i kinda tossed a coin and raised it back up to give it some body. I actually had to lower allot of the mid as it was too, as it was eating up the entire mix. i added allot of sweeping hertz on the pads that caused allot larger file size than i intended. Also several lover lapping freqs at different times. each would have taken a separate automation to fix but the file size didn't allow me to post it. i have a better mastered version but the file size is 21 mb in mp3. I will most certainly fix the hats and snares and re upload pretty soon. I appreciate the time you took to toss me some advice, its always appreciated and is mainly what has helped me get to where i am right now. I still have a long way to go in several areas, mastering and mixing is the main one. thanks again for taking time to drop a review off and i hope you keep track of my future works. Possibly even drop some feed back on them aswell. =)
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