The first thing that catches my ear is that the song is too distorted. Go for high levels without the distortion, if you can. If the song is supposed to be like that, then it's placed on way too many of the instruments. Like, it might be good for part of the song, but not the entire thing. Or, you should do something a bit more creative with it. The motif repeats for too long, and is too short to be repeating for as long as it was. Switch up the melodies at some point, and don't just take away and add blocks whenever. That's death of creativity right there. Though, keep working at it.