oooh, me likey. Jack put everything very well, I agree with him for the most part. The drums are very quiet, that's one of the main problems, but the feel is all there, very haunting and emotive. make more like this!
Great song bro :) I am also in Voltage square so check out my songs either if u r interested in co-operation or to help each other improve :)
I really like the ambient tone that it's got going on. Nice and chill, with a touch of a haunted feel? I also really like the subtle use of vocal samples throughout the song. I do have a few suggestions though.
First, the intro could have been around the 15-20 second mark, as opposed to 40 seconds. I think people would get interested a lot easier if they didn't have to listen to as long of an intro.
Second, I thought it could use a little more variation, or maybe some more instruments at parts. For a 5-minute song, it doesn't really change any. Maybe at some parts at some smooth brass melodies over it, or something similar? I think that would be a good addition to this track.
And lastly, I didn't care much for the drums. They just weren't present enough for someone to rap over this, and it made it sound to me more like an ambient track than a hip hop track. I think making the drums stand out more would make this a much more interesting track to listen to.
Overall, this is a good song, but with some tweaks here and there, it could be a GREAT song. I really dig its ambient tones, and it is a nice track to chill out to, but it needs a little more substance to really stand out.
Hope this helps dude. Keep up the good work!
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