Not bad ! You've made a good choice in your instruments (except the kick which sounds absolutely horrible to my ear, but I guess that's just a matter of taste), which contributes to create a nice ambient, between adventure, fear, caution and epicness. That's perfect for a videogame.
Your main theme gives me an impression of deja-vu but is indeed quite effective.
The only problem is that it remains the only main theme all the song long, with no interruption ! It's clear that you try to bring some variation by switching your theme from one voice to another and by changing the rythms, but in my opinion it's not enough. You need to give up this theme for a while (even a short while :P) if you want the listener to have pleasure to find it again !
Another issue (still in my opinion), is that we don't distinguish well your instruments, and the whole thing gives an impression of a big amalgam of sounds which can hardly be understood well, and which kind of breaks your melodic lines. Maybe some spatialisation could help you to deal with that !
A last thing I noticed is that there are some frictions during your sharp piano melody.
Finally, I rather liked your track, which was pretty captivating, and homogeneous, creating a very nice atmosphere. It was short enough not to get bored. Though, I recommand you not to keep to much the same main theme and to offer some breaks sometimes, and to work a bit on mixing-mastering. :)
Good job !
This is probably the most helpful review I've had yet o.o. I appreciate your opinion, highly.
I do agree, when I made this it was just mostly me fiddling with effects and messing with a beat that I enjoyed. It doesn't have any particular sound or melody that gives it that 'umph' lol.
I'll practice more, thank you ^_^
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.