Well, it has something, you just got to edit it a bit. Too repetitve, at least to me, dont be afraid to use some more dirty sounds, try to vary tuning a bit more (maybe more sounds), somewhat more fluent passages, timing is good though, I suggest working on the smoothening of your song, and it should earn you another star.
Good job anyways, 3/5, 7/10. Keep practicing.
Thanks for the tips man :D but yea I still have to work on this a lot more. I'm just so sick of it at the moment and I don't even want to look at it lol but I'll definitely keep this stuff in mind whenever I go back to it. I just have a lot more projects to work on at the moment(most of which are better than this) but thnx anyway :D
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.