i like it its pree nice for a first song :P
makes me think of my first.....but mine WAS FUCKING SHITY XD

LOL. This kicked my early songs butts hands down. The detuned saw you are using as the chords at 50: were a tad detuned, some times putting a little reverb can make lower the harshness of them. Good white noise flare at 48.
39-40 that measure seems out of key on a note.

Try fade ins and fade outs on certain sounds when you are transitioning measures or sounds( something i need work on myself). Measure transitions can be as simple as dropping the bass drum for a single 4 count. just something to feel like a change is coming.

Hope to see more in the future, keeping tabs on you sir

This is pretty good for a first song