it's slightly hard to do a comprehensive review without my good headphones, but you have done well, your track is very industrial, it feels a little void at times which is fine since you seem to be aiming at a more relaxed slow pace track. perhaps a little mixing and making it 30 seconds longer and you will have a 5 star track. right around 0:15 to 0:45 is where i really enjoyed it, the rest of the song is just kind of 'meh' for me. i hope this review helps.
I'd definitely say re=listen with good headphones or speakers, the sub frequencies really make this in my opinion. Also, it's only a work in progress. I will be adding quite a bit and changing some stuff up. Thanks for the feedback, and be sure to check back soon for the final product!
This is pretty good! Intense. O_O
5 stars out of 5
Really? Thanks! Wait for the finished product, I can promise you it'll blow this out of the water!