I hear a lot of Drum and Bass Music but your track is like 4-5 tracks in one...
and not like drum and bass, there is no construction in this track, 1 head melody, a bassline, the typical kick and snare beats. For example: http://youtu.be/2M8DRlPyUag
Make your track more simple: A Melody, some FX, basslines, kicks, some breaks, and the constuction must be simpler!
Is this your first track? For a first track is not to bad, work a little more to your tracks. If you need some help send me a massage, i will help you. [sorry, my english is bad]