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Death of Mars (DOM) is a sequel to song I made last year, called "Waking Up on Mars". This one isn't finished. So, I'm looking for opinions on what to fix.
iNiNEPT responds:
Interesting assessment. thanks for your input.
Alright, here is my take on this song.
The first thing I must address is the structure of the song. It kind of is random. Your transitions are a little rough and could use a lot of work. But then I heard the part at 1:29 and it sounded like a fairly good transition. That was the kind of thing you should be doing! It sounds very random and out of place in your other transitions. I think it could improve a lot. A lot of the song is really random too. You have piano, ambient sounding instruments, and heavy distorted synths. I think these all could mix, but you take one instrument at a time in this song and that is when the rough transitions are. I think you could fix this definitely. There are parts in the song that sound good together, but not great.
Overall this song could use some work. Keep at it though!
Also, it'd be awesome if you could check out my original song "Stranded" and give feedback!
3/5 stars
iNiNEPT responds:
Okay, this is really useful information. I'll try to work off of your points. I knew the transitions were rough, but I didn't really think about over arching structure. I suppose I have a lot to work on. Should keep me busy for a few weeks.
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