I think its incredible. :O Lol, the voice samples almost sound like they were from a video game. :)
My only complaint is that it gets pretty quiet at around 1:13... Like... not more quiet, i guess i was just expecting something to start building up for a louder and faster paced song that starts at around 2:08? Hmmm... I guess maybe it still works cuz its a theme, but yeah... good job anyways! Would you mind checking out my newest song? Trying to get some opinions on it... :) Thanks, and keep it up!
I thought I already responded to this..oh well. Thanks for the feedback, I'm glad you like it! :)
As for the build up issue you pointed out, it is intentional to fit with the character. The subtle haunting is where it gets "quieter" and the swells around 1:24 are her knocking on the bullies door and it builds from there to where it intensifies at 2:08, and she starts stealing the happiness/killing the bullies.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.