For that one, your intro was not representative of your track, you could've added a little bit of work and finesse. Try to use different kicks or drums at different intensity, or just add some variations to it!

For everything else: it was a good job :P You took good use of the dissonance, it fits well with the mood, and it flows correctly! Theme is coherent too, and the timestamp is constant enough.

As I said, the intro lacks of finesse, but at all, good piece!!