Well there are 3 dfferent point of views on how i can review this song:
1-(As your first song) I would say that you are on the right track and that you can certainly learn and better yourseld from what you have done here 7.5/10.
2-(As a normal submission) It feels kind of sloppy, and some mixing issues are showing, still not a bad composition 6/10
3-(As the september NAC Anger management)....well i guess you wanted more views or something like that because you dont display a single second in that music that makes me say...hell the guy is angry!! And also it is way too short for a competitive shot at the contest i think 2.5/10.
With that being said i am going to vote as if the submission had nothing to do with the NAC because i think you are on the right track to making music, just dont submit random audio to random contests that might make people judge you the wrong way.
Cheers and keep the working!
Oddly appropriate name.
I don't know if you'd call this a full song, since it's extremely short (and you have it listed as a loop :P) but it does have some level of progression and structure = so it is more of a song than a loop.
It sounded pretty decent, I liked the happy/bouncy feel of it and it looped fairly soundly.
Overall the sounds you're using clash a little too much, though, try filling the spectrum a little more smoothly (EQing and whatnot) and you should achieve a nicer sound.
The kick sounds fairly good; it sticks out a bit, but it's fairly noticeable and that's a good thing. The percussion does sound a little quiet during crescendos however, and your clap/snare also seems a little high in the spectrum (could be a punchier, also.)
I thought the ending sounded a little lazy, but then I realized it was supposed to loop and it worked. I'd really suggest putting some delay (echo) on that piano though, or at least some reverb, as it sounds pretty flat on its own.
Good for a first full song, and I certainly recommend you continue producing.
Thanks so much for the review man!
I definitely agree with your suggestion of the echo effect and i'll look into that.
As for EQ'ing I have no idea how to do that, but I will look it up on youtube and definitely become better!