Well there are 3 dfferent point of views on how i can review this song:
1-(As your first song) I would say that you are on the right track and that you can certainly learn and better yourseld from what you have done here 7.5/10.
2-(As a normal submission) It feels kind of sloppy, and some mixing issues are showing, still not a bad composition 6/10
3-(As the september NAC Anger management)....well i guess you wanted more views or something like that because you dont display a single second in that music that makes me say...hell the guy is angry!! And also it is way too short for a competitive shot at the contest i think 2.5/10.
With that being said i am going to vote as if the submission had nothing to do with the NAC because i think you are on the right track to making music, just dont submit random audio to random contests that might make people judge you the wrong way.
Cheers and keep the working!