I really like the direction this one is taking. However, the beat is far too simple for the melody that it plays. Personally, if I may add my two cents, I always feel as if you're getting lazy with your beats. They're generally moderately weak. Also, this WIP is lacking a good bassline, if it even has one. If that mid-range rythm is your bassline, it's not cutting it.
I also feel like I've heard this song before.
Keep it up, mate.