Here are some things to improve on.
Speak more clear, not that I couldn't tell what you said, but you did slightly slur some words.
Speak with more energy and more emphasis, it sounds like you're trying to keep your voice low so your roommates or neighbors don't hear you.
Get a pop filter for your mic, also don't speak directly at the mic. Speak at sorta a angle.
You do have a bit of background noise, not much, just maybe put some stuff up around where you record to catch the sound.
Practice, it helps.
Other than that, I really do think your voice is one that can get really good