I like the style. Very well written. Not much to change, except to make it longer. If you use FL Studio, I can show you how to reduce the file size. My email and msn is email@example.com
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I'll be putting the 1st one up soon... Updated sounds and everything... Might make it longer... If I don't sell it in a few weeks, Expect the Hottest song EVER!