I think it would sound good if you kept a steady beat and the techno higher rythm throughout the entire song, and instead of the snare try a different drum, anyways good piece just needs some tuning up.
Man, I've written songs in that time line, but I usually end up looking back at the song and saying 'wow could I have done that better'.
This song has actually very, err, cliche backrounds. Soft synths, 'cool sounding' basslines, and fast drums... not saying that this song is bad, by no means am I saying its bad. In fact, its good. But, I think you just need tow ork originality a little bit more, you know?
About the entire song, I really like it, but the hi hat volume is a little loud. Turn that downa little bit?
Great work, impressive for 30 minutes =) Keep it up! =D Check out my songs later?