good work man, I like this its got a lot of different elements to it and they work well together =]
the first thing i noticed was the volume level, compared to all the other tracks ive listend to on NG this definetly has a lot less volume. maybe thats because you produced it on a mobile app? but try mastering this so as to boost the overall level of the track, not too big of a deal though.
the only other thing is your outro with that really long note at the end I wasnt feeling it really, just because that note is somewhat sharp.
otherwise great work i give 4/5 here and 5/5 on the submission =]
pretty awesome cuz done with ipad but volumes should be better leveled
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.