If you want me to be completely honest I think you should begin this track at 0:54 and use that bit as an intro into something. I love that part. Maybe take your piano theme and throw it on a synth voice over some bass? You should watch some youtube videos on using GarageBand. I think that would help you a lot. I don't think you should consider this project finished just yet though. It has so much potential. I'm sorry if I'm not praising you enough but I dont think that"s what you're looking for in a review. I hope you understand and I hope this helped!
Thanks for the review, and you are correct, praise isn't what I am looking for.