Yay, it's CLEAN!! Good job on that one!
That's the first step forward, a good one, but there still plenty ahead!
You had your theme (melody starting at 0:12), it was coherent and pleasant to hear (which is great), but it doesn't have a proper introduction, one in which we can recognize the theme. The actual introduction is introducing another theme that is never fully apearing (or at least I can't recognize enough of the present one).
The passage from 4/4 to 3/4 for 2 seconds at 0:24 is really awkward.
And that's it. That's a good thing you got there!
Thanks, it was an experimental track, didn't really have a way to be introduced. The introduction melody starting after the clown sample, was sort of the introduction, in fact funny enough the introduction melody is an inverse of the main melody. Tricky ;D hehe, I was pleased as well that I was able to create a coherent and pleasant sounding track. I wanted some sort of drop for the 2nd half of the track so I figured an awkward sort of tempo change was in order, it does fit to me even though it may sound too strange to someone else. The main average tempo increases from 140-150bpm in the intro, then averages that until the drop where it drops to around 60 or 80 or 100, I forgot haha, but yea I guess it could of done without that partial slowdown. ^_^ I hope to make more like this in terms of well overall coherence and pleasing to hear.