really good job on this! I cant really find too much i think could be improved aside from abit of mixing/mastering for example around 4 minutes when (it sounds like a piano) comes in and plays those chords I liked that part, but it just sounded like it needed to be mixed or eq'd a bit more. The only other thing i can think of is to maybe build more tension before drops like at the 3 minute mark the music just fell off and It felt unnatural in a way.
otherwise I think it would do great to help tell a story. the song does that in a way already it changes instrumentally a lot and it sounds like there is always a new element comming in somewhere. Great work keep it up! 4.5/5 here and 5/5 on the submission =]
Thank you for the kind words and telling me the areas of improvement. Though, that unnatural feeling drop at 3 minutes is supposed to feel like an unnatural falling off in the music intentionally, like if you fall off a building and someone catches you by only a few feet. One of the characters in the story has telekinesis and can hold people in the air up only a couple feet. So if you fell off a building, she'd be able to save you, but only just. It's a bit harder to notice intentionality in just music, but my girlfriend and I can't animate worth a darn to make a video for the song XD
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.