The melancholy in this piece is quite striking and communicates the essence of your poetry quite well. My favorite part is from :30-:37. Around the :32 mark, there is this lush, dense chord that rings out beautifully. Subtle details, such as the light bass drum hits, enhance the atmosphere. The unresolved ending is wonderful. It leaves such a sad sense of self-reflection. The piece is calming and beautiful as a whole but could use some work to become even better. Here are some of the ideas that came to my mind.
Direction. The piece is atmospheric and brooding, but it mostly meanders in a constant ebb and flow with taking me anywhere much different. There is a layering of instruments as the piece progresses, and I like that, but it ultimately falls flat without much of a climax. It grows from the beginning to 1:58, causing me to expect some type of an emotional high point with incredible tension, a peak from which the piece would descend until that unresolved end. After all the growth though, all the energy dropped and it went back to where it started, and that felt more accidental than intentional. I would have loved a true climax to make this piece truly tell a story. The story you wrote in the comments.
I also would have liked a little more dissonance in the strings to show the anxiety and confusion of the protagonist. Putting a delay effect on the piano would have been cool. I think that it would contribute to the ethereal feel that you paint. And this is all subjective, but I would have liked a stronger focus on melody. The long, sustained strings notes create a haunting and yet peaceful feel over the repeating chord progression, but the piece ends up being more forgettable and pleasant than profound and memorable. You've got a nice, flowing atmosphere, but no melodic voice to carry the listener on a journey.
I enjoy this piece. Keep up the composing!
wow this gives me a sense of being in Nazi Germany, A young poet (your poetry) recounting his journey through poetry as he alludes the nazis... the violins are heart wrenching very sad as to say he was caught and torn from his family...or witnessed a death! Amazing piece bro Well done
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Thanks for the positive criticism!
You actually built a scene in my mind.
I'll make sure to check it out!
Thanks, yet again.
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