That tea pouring and woman speaking seemed like it was perfectly timed.

So I saw the audio forum lounge blow up after you complained about zero bombers and every now and then I like to check "So are these really zero-bombing problems or do they just suck at music and don't want to admit it?"

You don't suck. You're fucking awesome. That kick in this song is better than MY kicks even though you clearly haven't figured out how to properly mix a song (but that's ok, your obvious incredible talent will conquer this in no time). That melody is superb and catchy, but the fact that the song was just thrown together shows in the failure of different elements to form a coherent soundscape. Figuring out a particular "style" for a song so that everything fits together is tricky, and takes lots of practice, so don't worry too much about that.

0:56 is by far my favorite part of the song. The potential of the song really shines at that point, but sadly you put in a very intrusive breakdown that, rather than provide variation for the listener, simply destroys the song's direction, and after that everything just falls apart. I would recommend trying to focus more on building better song structure and expanding your repertoire of musical techniques so you can sustain the song for more than 4 minutes, and supporting the melodic high points of the song.