It definitely sounds like the inner workings of a mind in turmoil, so I do say you hit your mark! I dislike how it's both a song and so short. As a title screen song, you'd figure it would loop nicely, just in case someone decides to linger about. Also, it also feels like it may have been able to set a nice setting for a game that takes place in a dreamland in civil war, which then helps the game progress into the main theme, and henceforth, the main musical theme, should it have been longer, or more in-depth. Nonetheless, it's a good piece! I'd definitely drag you about for a game jam if I could make anything better than an HTML document.