Great, but...
You did another great song...
I just want to comment on the audio software you're using. All your instruments sounds like old MIDI... So I guess it's what you're using.
I'm not too much knowledgeable about these softwares but I think it doesn't match up with your talent because while the melody is great, the instruments sound fakes.
As my roomate told me, while I was listening to your song, it sounds like 8-bit.
So, basically look for something which would match up with your talent, something which would render your songs sound like real live instruments.