I say, you did a lot better here, the drums were amazing and your tempo is much better than before, I think you had the right idea. However, there is a second synth, the one that goes up and repeats, seem a bit off. there are these things called scales and these things tell you that you are only restricted to these certain notes, doing so would cause that "off" thing. Sorry if I'm criticizing you a bit much :PP Overall you did a lot better than before, and by the way...THANK YOU!!! While I was tweaking with the cutoff knob on the Z3ta preset "Chords of Life" I found out this was the synth that I was looking for along time ago, and my bro is still remixing.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.