So - first i have to say, that i think this to be a solid work and i believe it took you some time to create the track. Its well structured, the single "sound-lines" can be noticed well - the tunes are correct, also the speed is ok.
The problem in my opinion is, that the dynamic of real strings cant be reached by artificiant instruments (or i am just inable to handle them :> ). One year ago i tried to create the same track to understand how it works, but i aborted because of the "string-problem".
Then: I would take more power for the deep notes and chose another drum kit. The last thing i would change is the volume. It should be dynamic / moving and notbe static because"heÂ´s a pirate" is a really emotional track - so use the full volume-spectrum!
Hope this was helpful. Inspite of my critics i think the effort to try out that heav piece should be appreciated :D