Dude - u didnt evolve the song like a trance piece. U gave away the the full on melody too fast - which made this a little repetitive. And the lead - really made it sound like a techno track. The transitions could have been a little more appearent, as well as making that ending now sound Uber abrupt. Try adding in some sweeps man, or some cymbal crashes at the intro, for some good transitory elements.
It's not bad, but I find it boring. The beeps and blips at 1:44 are just evil. Power up that under lying layer and synth.
thanks a lot for ur opinion man! It means a lot! Yeah i can agree with you. When i make my songs im maybe satisfied with it in tge beginning but after listening to the song a lot i can hear what part that needs for work and so on... and this bleep sound is maybe to much , i mean it doesnt fit that well with the rest of synths and bass.
I will add that to my improve list!=)
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