that intro synth really made no sense to me, and it was really really killer on the ears.
remember, and sometimes I have trouble with this, but you're not just making something that you enjoy producing, but you're making something that you're going to want others to listen to.
one thing i will complement, however, is how that heavy bass carries the song. i personally like a big bass; i guess it's just because im a bassist (and a guitarist, and a pianist, and etc.etc.).
but you did a nice job on the bass.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.