1. You missed a lot of notes that are needed to keep the rhythm and melody in sync. It sounded bad with a lot of note skipping. That happened within the first 30 seconds of the music.
2. The fast part (cascading-like part) was too rushed.
3. You need accompaniments, that's for sure.
thats a long note
like evryone else is saying, you should definatly cu t it down...is that still possible? I was wondering why did you keep it so long?
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