The melody you have going is a little catchy, however it's hard to hear sometimes. (not that important tho)
the wobbles are used well, good ending sound and it faded out haha
some parts sound very sour sorry to say :( find out what's going on, it's mainly in the intro that you can really tell.
I've heard the earlier versions of this song, you are in the right direction!
Much thanks for the detailed comment man it helps, I'm just about to upload an edit that is practically finished just to figure out whether it has become better or worse. Check it out!